Should I write on Saturdays, or take a nap? - hydro tub
Nawlins Review, Part 1, caused by hydro and Elyslund
CS Scotkin
He flew to Nawlins. Losses Flyin too heavy to carry far north.
The first was looking through a dirty window
I do not know anyone. Specifically, my.
There were one hundred U.S. dollars in his pocket, he stood
between me and the cold to die in the north-east of isolation.
I asked the taxi driver who could be with the limited resources ...
His smiling face in the mirror gloss black ...
took me to a guesthouse in the magazine ..
for "White Christian Ladies".
Paid my twenty years for a bed and 2 meals per day for a week.
This place is clean, naked.
I have my first palmetto bug is a bathtub,
scream so loud that I hear on the station.
Patron smiled sympathetically and pumpkins ...
Read the classifieds and rode on a trolley uptown
open-mouthed wonder, I'm Alicia.
And I got the job! A live in housekeeper
my own castle in the basement
fight the dragon picked up my scent.
Ian overpayment to cook two meals per day
no documents and Fishin old doctor from time to time.
The rest of the time I was.
Explore the Audubon Park, French Quarter,
the eardrum that many accents.
Artist Jackson Square, Café du Monde
LSU Tigers, alligators in the swamp.
Oysters, grits, gumbo, jambalaya, Socket Letta.
Strange names
learn to pronounce words correctly, CAL Yope not Cal-Lye-o-pee.
More ....
Saturday, January 9, 2010
Hydro Tub Should I Write On Saturdays, Or Take A Nap?
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4 comments:
I can not answer with certainty, perhaps even mention it because I give "honest feedback." Some of the expression in his poem is very clever. For example, some metaphors, especially the Castle / Dragon is weak and meaningless for me. And the loss of the bear "too difficult" is not for poetry for adults, I think that small.
Moreover, the poem seems to have, were very fun to write. Jazz is, without knowing why a reasonable ... perhaps the issues can and focus on thoughts or sounds. Sometimes I can feel exciting, but terrifying novel that he describes. So yeah ... I suspect the answer to your question depends on the value of sleep and interfere with how my criticism.
You need to write!
Wonderful story, and I think you very much!
Greetings to a new beginning.
I look forward to more.
Write to bed first, then, then you write more.
Even if you want!
a nap? narrrrr your property
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